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<p style="margin-top:0;margin-bottom:0">Mick:</p>
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<p style="margin-top:0;margin-bottom:0">I really love the style of this text from what I've read so far. I don't really have the time these days to do a full line edit of the kind you are requesting, but I wanted to say that I've looked through the first few
chapters and the overall structure (of Part One), and it seems like a really great style/tone and approach for your audience (I also get that you're not inventing that approach whole-cloth, but all creativity involves borrowing
<span>😊)</span>. I am rather an anti-fan of JavaScript personally, but I certainly acknowledge its essential role in web apps, and i appreciate all of the platforms now available, like phaser, as starting points. I definitely appreciate your general approach
to learning game-code.</p>
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<p style="margin-top:0;margin-bottom:0">As you may recall, I started my own engagement with the Floss world expressing great skepticism about the role of static manuals vs video tutorials, in today's world. That's certainly lessened, to some degree, after
writing/rewriting two Floss manuals and then all the work I've done more recently for the VA (US Gov't Dept of Veterans Affairs), which has involved a fair amount of static guides along with a ton of more dynamic/immersive eLearning content. But a really
engaging writing style seems crucial to the success of what you're doing especially -- a static-manual intro to coding -- and I think you've got it. </p>
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<p style="margin-top:0;margin-bottom:0">Maybe I'll consider taking my 12-part video series on coding a particular Unity gaming scenario and redoing it in Floss-land. I dunno. The static manuals I've seen for Unity have been deadly affairs, compared to the
video tutorials, but your approach gives me some new ideas.</p>
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<p style="margin-top:0;margin-bottom:0">Best,</p>
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<div class="PlainText">Many thanks Dharitree,<br>
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Yes I was thinking by the end of the month as a deadline for feedback.<br>
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Then I can try to do a completed draft of the book in time for a soft<br>
launch at Mozilla Festival at the end of October where we are doing a<br>
workshop on this.<br>
<a href="https://github.com/MozillaFestival/mozfest-program-2018/issues/359" id="LPlnk189575" class="OWAAutoLink" previewremoved="true">https://github.com/MozillaFestival/mozfest-program-2018/issues/359</a>
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On 15/09/18 14:33, Dharitree Joshi wrote:<br>
> Hello Nick,<br>
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> I will go through the first draft. I have a login, I think I will be<br>
> able to do the corrections myself. If not I will get back to you.<br>
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> I wanted to know, is there a date in your mind, when you would like to<br>
> have the first draft reviewed? Do let me know.<br>
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> Thanks again.<br>
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> Best regards,<br>
> Dharitree<br>
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On 15/09/18 14:27, mick@flossmanuals.net wrote:<br>
> Hi there,<br>
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> I've done a first draft of Part One of a book on learning how to code by<br>
> making games here.<br>
> <a href="http://write.flossmanuals.net/learn-javascript-with-phaser/" id="LPlnk759621" class="OWAAutoLink" previewremoved="true">
http://write.flossmanuals.net/learn-javascript-with-phaser/</a><br>
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> It would be great to get feedback. What would you change? what's just<br>
> wrong? what's missing?<br>
> Just do Part One if that's ok. I'll use your feedback in doing Part Two<br>
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> Could you put your comments here<br>
> <a href="https://public.etherpad-mozilla.org/p/review-phaser-book" id="LPlnk861040" class="OWAAutoLink" previewremoved="true">
https://public.etherpad-mozilla.org/p/review-phaser-book</a><br>
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> Feel free to edit typo/s or messy writing directly if you already have a<br>
> log in, or email me if you don't.<br>
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> Many tha<br>
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