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    <p>Hi there, <br>
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    <p>Many thanks for your feedback Matt!<br>
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    I'm glad it may give you some ideas. I do think that the combination
    of static docs and more dynamic tools like code playgrounds (as in
    this manual) and videos can work well. <br>
    <br>
    In this case I used Codepen for part one which I was not totally
    happy with, but together with a local volunteer we have found a good
    alternative in Glitch. <br>
    <a class="moz-txt-link-freetext" href="https://glitch.com/">https://glitch.com/</a><br>
    <br>
    Thanks<br>
    Mick<br>
    <br>
    <div class="moz-cite-prefix">On 15/09/18 19:32, M R wrote:<br>
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        <p style="margin-top:0;margin-bottom:0">Mick:</p>
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        <p style="margin-top:0;margin-bottom:0">I really love the style
          of this text from what I've read so far.  I don't really have
          the time these days to do a full line edit of the kind you are
          requesting, but I wanted to say that I've looked through the
          first few chapters and the overall structure (of Part One),
          and it seems like a really great style/tone and approach for
          your audience (I also get that you're not inventing that
          approach whole-cloth, but all creativity involves borrowing
          <span>😊)</span>.  I am rather an anti-fan of JavaScript
          personally, but I certainly acknowledge its essential role in
          web apps, and i appreciate all of the platforms now available,
          like phaser, as starting points.  I definitely appreciate your
          general approach to learning game-code.</p>
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        <p style="margin-top:0;margin-bottom:0">As you may recall, I
          started my own engagement with the Floss world expressing
          great skepticism about the role of static manuals vs video
          tutorials, in today's world.  That's certainly lessened, to
          some degree, after writing/rewriting two Floss manuals and
          then all the work I've done more recently for the VA (US Gov't
          Dept of Veterans Affairs), which has involved a fair amount of
          static guides along with a ton of more dynamic/immersive
          eLearning content.  But a really engaging writing style seems
          crucial to the success of what you're doing especially -- a
          static-manual intro to coding -- and I think you've got it.  </p>
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        <p style="margin-top:0;margin-bottom:0">Maybe I'll consider
          taking my 12-part video series on coding a particular Unity
          gaming scenario and redoing it in Floss-land.   I dunno.  The
          static manuals I've seen for Unity have been deadly affairs,
          compared to the video tutorials, but your approach gives me
          some new ideas.</p>
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        <p style="margin-top:0;margin-bottom:0">Best,</p>
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        <p style="margin-top:0;margin-bottom:0">Matt</p>
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              <b>Sent:</b> Saturday, September 15, 2018 8:38 AM<br>
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              <b>Subject:</b> Re: [FM Discuss] Review wanted of Phaser
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                <div class="PlainText">Many thanks Dharitree,<br>
                  <br>
                  Yes I was thinking by the end of the month as  a
                  deadline for feedback.<br>
                  <br>
                  Then I can try to do a completed draft of the book in
                  time for a soft<br>
                  launch at Mozilla Festival at the end of October where
                  we are doing a<br>
                  workshop on this.<br>
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                  Thanks again<br>
                  Mick<br>
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                  On 15/09/18 14:33, Dharitree Joshi wrote:<br>
                  > Hello Nick,<br>
                  ><br>
                  > I will go through the first draft. I have a
                  login, I think I will be<br>
                  > able to do the corrections myself. If not I will
                  get back to you.<br>
                  ><br>
                  > I wanted to know, is there a date in your mind,
                  when you would like to<br>
                  > have the first draft reviewed? Do let me know.<br>
                  ><br>
                  > Thanks again.<br>
                  ><br>
                  > Best regards,<br>
                  > Dharitree<br>
                  ><br>
                  ><br>
                  ><br>
                  <br>
                  On 15/09/18 14:27, <a class="moz-txt-link-abbreviated" href="mailto:mick@flossmanuals.net">mick@flossmanuals.net</a> wrote:<br>
                  > Hi there,<br>
                  ><br>
                  > I've done a first draft of Part One of a book on
                  learning how to code by<br>
                  > making games here.<br>
                  > <a
                    href="http://write.flossmanuals.net/learn-javascript-with-phaser/"
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                    previewremoved="true" moz-do-not-send="true">
http://write.flossmanuals.net/learn-javascript-with-phaser/</a><br>
                  ><br>
                  > It would be great to get feedback. What would you
                  change? what's just<br>
                  > wrong? what's missing?<br>
                  > Just do Part One if that's ok. I'll use your
                  feedback in doing Part Two<br>
                  ><br>
                  > Could you put your comments here<br>
                  > <a
                    href="https://public.etherpad-mozilla.org/p/review-phaser-book"
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                    previewremoved="true" moz-do-not-send="true">
https://public.etherpad-mozilla.org/p/review-phaser-book</a><br>
                  ><br>
                  > Feel free to edit typo/s or messy writing
                  directly if you already have a<br>
                  > log in, or email me if you don't.<br>
                  ><br>
                  > Many tha<br>
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